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03 September 2004 @ 06:09 pm
Crack Fic For Mikkeneko  

Fic requests can be made here and my previous three completed requests (Envy's Birthday Gift, Banana, and Blankets and Green Earmuffs) came be accessed through here.

Read forward at your own risk. It's a Wrath/Sloth fic and it's not exactly work-safe.

If She Had Loved Me...
Written under commision by mikkeneko

If Mommy hadn’t given me back to the gate…If she had loved me just a little bit…If I didn’t have the tattoo on my foot… If I hadn’t taken Edward’s arm and leg… If she had loved me just a little bit…If I hadn’t eaten the impure stones… If they hadn’t betrayed me and I never met Envy… If she had loved me just a little bit…

“Oh,” the ever-calm voice mumbled in his ear at his side; “Good. You’re awake.”

He curled up against her naked body. “Is what we’re doing… sick?”

She stroked his hair, gentle, lithe fingers untangling his ever-unruly hair. To him, she was comfort, not in the way that he would have preferred it, but he felt secure and the dreams of the times behind the gate failed to bother him when she held him against her fluid breast and rocked him. It made sense, at least to him, that she had once been a mother.

“Who told you that?” she whispered, kissing him gently on the forehead.

Wrath squirmed and hid his face, ashamed. “Envy said it,” he mumbled.

Sloth laughed quietly and patted his head. “Yes, probably,” she admitted to him, but hugging him all the closer and kissing him on the chest, “but Envy didn’t say it to be mean. He’s just blunt with his words – that’s all.”

He smiled and curled up tightly against her, the fluid feeling of even her humanoid skin serving as a comforting reminder of the womb that he’d ended his life in before being ripped from then returned to the gate. Above him, she sighed and entwined her fingers about his.
“It’s more wrong for you to do this to me, anyhow,” Sloth whispered in his hair affectionately and with a touch of rare humour; “I’m younger than you.”

To anyone else, this would have driven him into a rage, but he found it funny when she said the words. He laughed and she tickled him, sending his giggles higher and her smile grew wider, pleasuring him more than the way that she touched him. He loved her even more when she was like this.

If she had loved me just a little bit, just a little, she would have smiled, just like this.


You know, this sort of scares me, even though I wrote it...

Current Mood: aggravatedaggravated
Current Music: "Bang Bang (My Baby Shot Me Down)" - Kill Bill Vol. One
Absolutely no decorum.niwakaame on September 3rd, 2004 06:35 pm (UTC)
*raises hand* I liked it! It's..hmm...interesting.hmm.Well,it's hard to judge not basing on the theme. Yah.I understand wha tyou mean by thinking it's kind of scary ...(wow,what great feedback).
♞ lovely little liar ♞metallic_sweet on September 3rd, 2004 06:40 pm (UTC)
All feedback is good. ^^
Poison Envy: Angel Wings [Gift from Tears_priestess]winter_ruins on September 3rd, 2004 06:37 pm (UTC)
[fangirls] Good ole' Envy. Giving somewhat of a plot to a fic [/fangirling]

Very good. I liked it. I really like the... what's the word? Not so much dialog, but the italicized writing. <3 It's cute.

I liked it. ^^
♞ lovely little liar ♞metallic_sweet on September 3rd, 2004 06:43 pm (UTC)
I just kept thinking, "Sigmund Freud would have a ball with this and then some."

All fics, no matter how short, needs a plot, and I've been writing so much Envy lately so, hell, I fed his vindictive side.

I'm glad that you enjoyed it. ^^

On a side note, did you know I never wrote Envy before these fics?
Poison Envy: I'm the bombwinter_ruins on September 3rd, 2004 06:46 pm (UTC)
XD Yesh he would. XD

Exactly! And Envy is always the best way to go.

I'm glad I did, too. XD Thanks.

....Seriously? Then I'm proud to claim being the reason you ever wrote Envy! Woo! XDD
i am a jedi, like my father before metatooine on September 3rd, 2004 07:06 pm (UTC)
I just kept thinking, "Sigmund Freud would have a ball with this and then some."

And then some more.

I really liked this story. I expected it to be, well, more crack-ish, but it was very well-written and thought out as opposed to most, like, crack crackfic.

*loves the story*
♞ lovely little liar ♞metallic_sweet on September 3rd, 2004 07:11 pm (UTC)
He'd probably have two balls. He'd have three if it wasn't scientifically impossible.

Whee, people like it! And my crack fic has a plot. Woot!
mikkeneko on September 3rd, 2004 06:51 pm (UTC)
omgcrack!fic. T_T Yey.

You are so awesome. *hugs* This is just about exactly what I was envisioning. I like what Envy said about them, it's such an Envyish thing to say. <3 And definitely the best line is the "I'm younger than you, anyway."

♞ lovely little liar ♞: SAT Testingmetallic_sweet on September 3rd, 2004 07:08 pm (UTC)
Hurrah! I'm so happy that you liked it, and I can't believe I hit it on the nose.

I stuck the younger line in to make myself feel better and to shut Freud up. I'm glad it came off well.
Kecen: Irony Aheadkecen on November 10th, 2005 05:11 am (UTC)
I must say this is good even not considering the crack premise. It makes me feel fuzzy inside.
...I'm just a fan of crack pairings. You should see my main icon.