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17 November 2007 @ 12:17 pm
SAVE ME: Ch. 14  
Title: Save Me
Rating: R
Characters: Roy Mustang, Maes Hughes, Ed Elric (no pairing)
Warnings: Violence and ANGST. (yaaay!)
Summary: Roy Mustang is sent to Lior and is captured. After five long weeks of torture, will he ever recover?

Here is CH. 14: Roy watched Maes move out of the door, pale-faced and frightened.

((NOTE: I actually had an alternate beginning to this chapter, but I decided that I didn't like it and started over. I will not be posting it, but if anyone wants to read it I'd be willing to email it. It's unedited, unfinished crap that's more than a little squicky in my opinion, but if you're interested, just let me know.))

Click here to start from the beginning.

Current Mood: exanimateexanimate
kashicatkashicat on November 18th, 2007 12:18 am (UTC)
Hm. I think I'd like to see that alternate beginning. :-)

And! Yay! I'd been thinking early this morning, "I wonder if she'll post another chapter over the weekend?" And then, while working on my NaNo, I peeked into my email and saw the notification.

I had to force myself to get my NaNo daily word quota written before I was allowed to go read the chapter!

Meanwhile, the chapter...yegods. Can Roy get any more traumatized?? And you say you're going to resolve this story in only another chapter or two?? Say it ain't so!

Anyway, I loved it. As always!
Hewene: eyesayhello on November 18th, 2007 01:39 am (UTC)
Oh, owie, oh dear. Ouch this one hurt. Poor Roy. Poor Maes. Poor Ed. Poor everyone. I'm really scared just what Roy will do. He *seemed* to be doing better... calming himself, working himself back into rationality. Damn that Jenkins! He needs to burn...

I guess I'd like to read the alternate start. You wouldn't have mentioned it if there wasn't some merit to it... sayhello15us at yahoo dot com, please.


dreamer1789: equivalent_exchangedreamer1789 on November 18th, 2007 09:14 am (UTC)
Thus my weekly dose of angst reaches its norm. ^^ Intense chapter. You're really putting them all through hell. XD I wouldn't mind seeing the alternative beginning either...
sevlowsevlow on November 18th, 2007 04:47 pm (UTC)
eep. thanks :)

what's your email?
dreamer1789: approveddreamer1789 on November 19th, 2007 06:29 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you for sharing! ♥

In a way, I like the alternative beginning even better, because it was even more chaotic, overpowering and twisted. ^^ The way you wrote that Roy couldn't distinguish reality for hallucination was so strong and convincing. Oh, loved the constant return of alchemy, and how what was a safe thought became an even worse nightmare.

Then again, there is much to say for the chapter you've posted, because it implies to much, and is strong and beautiful in its own way. :)
mir280mir280 on November 18th, 2007 05:56 pm (UTC)
I'm very worried about what's going to happen to Roy. I can just see him trying to burn it off. At least if he does try that he can control the depth of the burn, not that that means anything in his state of mind. It would be a shame for him to die after surviving eveything and believeing the horrible things the voices say to boot. I am certainly hoping that you have more than one chapter left to write even though you've already said two chapters left and this was one of them. I'm still hoping for Roy to pull through somehow.