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09 December 2006 @ 02:03 pm
My first ever Fan fic.. and my first ever FMA fanfic too!!  
This is the first part of the story.. there is no naughty parts in this one, but I just wanted to post this part even before I finished the whole thing because I want to see what people think so far.. so please give me some constructive critism here !!



Title: After the Fall
Author: Seaweedotter
Characters: Roy x Ed (and a tiny bit of Hawkeye emo)
Rating: R to NC-17 (overall for language and nudity) but PG rating for
this section for language.
Warnings/Disclaimers: The story may change the continuity from the end
of episode 25 in the TV series just a tiny bit, it takes place after
Hughes' death but before Ed, Al, and Winry take the train to Rush Valley
Also please bear with me, this is my first attempt at FMA fanfic, or *ANY*
fanfic at all.
The characters obviously belong to thier creators, not me.



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Current Mood: nervousnervous
 
 
Dani: royxed snowcuylerjade on December 9th, 2006 08:43 pm (UTC)
I think you've got a good start. You've got some grammar issues that need to be worked out, but a good beta could help you with that. If you don't have one, I'm available and would be happy to help!! ^__^

I like the way that you've written it (the mood). Dark and depressing, yet still hopeful. Works well with the story line.

I can't wait to read more.
Sushi Freakseaweedotter on December 9th, 2006 11:58 pm (UTC)
If you want to, sure.. Not sure what a beta does exactly but if you wanna help, I would appreciate it!
Danicuylerjade on December 10th, 2006 03:41 am (UTC)
^__^ A beta basically checks for grammar & spelling issues, and can also help with characterization and sometimes plot. They can be used to bounce ideas off of or just as a live version of a spell/grammar check. It's up to the writer.

I would be happy to help beta your stories, if you want! The people I usually help are in a quiet period right now, so I've been really slow on stories to look over.

You can email it to me, if you want or I can just copy/paste it to edit/revise. Your choice.

Also, what program do you have? I usually use MS Word, but if you prefer another, just let me know!!

My email is cdcatterson@sbcglobal.net

-Dani