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01 January 2004 @ 02:11 am
hi from the newbie...and a ficlet  
Hi everybody--happy new year :) Joined the community on a whim since I love this show so far, it's a new obsession really. And since I like to dabble in fanfiction, I wrote a very, VERY short ficlet from Ed's POV. Sound fun? Well, it takes place during the second half of episode 8, which makes it psychotic. I don't know what possessed me to write it, but tell me what you think...even if you think it sucks. It's a really weird piece of work and I'm curious to see what you have to say. :3 (All rights reserved, yadda yadda...)


Ringing.
clang clash scrape
and the smell of dry ice and slightly thawing meat and blood
blood
My blood, or the meat or the Nina-creature's?
and he said that I should know what it's like to kill, I should understand him--but God, I...
Mom...
I don't ever want to. If understanding him is what it takes for me to be an alchemist, I can't. My eyes are fixated on his. He's laughing.
Have I been screaming?
cold sweat makes way for primal instinct and suddenly
I know I'm going to die. Mom, how do you stare death in face and accept it?
I'm screaming--I can't think
I'M GOING TO DIE
HE'S GOING TO KILL ME
palm meets metal fist and blade appears without thinking and if i don't kill him firsthe'llkillmeKILL HIM
arm swings back as body is jerked back and i swing backwards
DON'T KILL ME PLEASE DON'T DON'T I
i don't want to die and the blade bounces off of a hard metal plate...Al...?
blood on the wall, blood on the floor and all over my slashed arm.
We are not gods. We cannot save. We're human. We're children.
I press my forehead against Al's breastplate, my tears running down the cool metal. I sob.
I don't want to die.
 
 
HJ - (Hikari)hj_hikari on January 1st, 2004 01:52 am (UTC)
It's a nice piece, really captures the emotion of that episode, fear and hopelessness.

So little people write FMA..@@; (and I do nothing..can't write >P)
Brenda: sasukehikari_light on January 1st, 2004 08:15 am (UTC)
*claps* it very well done *nods* show's what poor little ed has in his mind during that episode *nods* *nods*

welcome to the community btw ^^
Kristopherlemonlimey on January 1st, 2004 12:33 pm (UTC)
^_^ Thank you for your input and for the welcome!
Lilaspegasus_01 on January 1st, 2004 03:41 pm (UTC)
Wow. I loved the style. It's hard to make this type of writing work, but given the episode, it's perfect! I actully just rewatched ep 8, and this fic fits Ed's mental state SO well from that moment! *claps* Congrats! I hope you write more fics soon! Not enough FMA fics in English out there.