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20 April 2006 @ 07:54 pm
EdWin ficcage ^^  
Title: With No Intention
Author/Artist: sull89 (Me!^^)
Theme(s): {4} In a world without words.
Pairing: Edward Elric and Winry Rockbell
Fandom: FullMetal Alchemist
Spoilers: None
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: FullMetal Alchemist and all associated characters, locations, and creations © Hiromu Arakawa.

Winry understands that sometimes, not letting those words seep out is the safest thing she can do.

Written for the 30_quills LJ FanFic Challenge.
Cross-posted to lots of different places.

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'Tis short, only about one and a half pages on Word. Constructive critisism (and comments in general ^^) are appreciated!
 
 
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havocmangawip: sciezka dedhavocmangawip on April 21st, 2006 01:02 am (UTC)
A well written story, but check your title.
Did you mean she had no "intent" to send the letter?

It would be this one...
http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=intention

The word you currently have in the title:
http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=intensions
The state or quality of being intense; intensity.
The act of becoming intense or more intense; intensification.
Logic. The sum of the attributes contained in a term.

Unless it is a British spelling that I'm not finding.

Just thought I'd give you a heads up.
Sullsull89 on April 21st, 2006 01:41 am (UTC)
Re: A well written story, but check your title.
OMG... you're right. *facepalm* I thought it looked wrong when I read it, but I couldn't figure out why... *shakes head* Seems like that's why. Thank you so much for pointing that out. I fixed it.
^^;; I can't believe I did that... Thank you again for showing me that!
havocmangawiphavocmangawip on April 21st, 2006 01:49 am (UTC)
No problem!
Stinking homophones! ;) I knew it had to be a small oversight since everything else was well spellchecked!

Better to get it early, and get it fixed is my motto.

I cringe, but then love it when people find my super guilty of habits. (I fail at comma usage. I NEED to buy "Eats, Shoots and Leaves" and study it... no, memorize it. I'm more guilty of the run-on sentence than Hemingway, and I'm not him.)
Sull: Woahsull89 on April 21st, 2006 02:04 am (UTC)
Re: No problem!
Thank you. ^^ But still, it was in my title! Of all places, I had to miss it in the title... -_-; I feel idiotic, now. But thank you. I am glad that you caught it now, *nods* Yes, so I can change it before a ton more people notice, hopefully.

I agree with your motto, I do. It is very true, oui!

It does make me flinch, too, when someone finds a mistake like that, but then I get all happy they found it so I can fix it. And I thank you again for doing that! ^^ (Haha, I used to overuse commas sooo bad. ^^; Had to force myself to stop, and it was hard! lol, good luck with fixing that!)
havocmangawiphavocmangawip on April 21st, 2006 02:08 am (UTC)
I'm working on it...
But sadly, I'm having so much fun writing and getting characterization down that as long as my dialog is done correctly... as my beta Sanna says, "You do the inner workings so well, the characterization, wow... now we just have to work on the outer workings."

(I took it as a pat on the back, and to look more carefully, as I FIX everything the grammar check SAYS to fix... and I look and look. SIGH. She still finds things! She wins at life. I love how her edits come out.)

Eh, I guess I have the luxury of being one of the few people who writes manga!Havoc... paired with SOMEONE. :D Whee.
Sullsull89 on April 21st, 2006 02:24 am (UTC)
Re: I'm working on it...
XD, I know what you mean! When I get into my writing mode I'm so focused on keeping every in character and loving when it comes out right that I kind of forget the technicalities of our language. ^^; Then have to go back a day later, re-read my fic, and then fix all the errors I found because of it. Although I got one of my friends to beta this story for me, because I wrote it start to finish this afternoon, and wanted to post it tonight. ^^; So had her check it for me, which I usually don't do, and she just deleated a few words and re-arranged some, basically.

<3 for beta friends, right? Even though I dun have a permanant one, I dunno what I'd do without the two I've got that help me when I need it. Haha, your beta sounds really good! Especially if she can find the things that the grammar check misses.

lol, I have yet to branch away from EdWin... I'm afraid that I'd murder other pairings... Not that I don't do that to them, but yea. Where's your stuff? Is it up anywhere? I'm always looking for new things to read. *nods* And I really haven't seen any manga!Havoc.
havocmangawiphavocmangawip on April 21st, 2006 02:28 am (UTC)
The edited, latest stuff. :) SOME still needs beta.
http://www.fanfiction.net/~havocmangawip

It's all there. :) Almost 97 k words good gosh. I've been working on it since December.

Thanks! I'll have to look for your EdWin. I love a well done EdWin and it's HARD to find!

It is rated M... because Havoc is a grown-up, and does grown-up things. Read at your own discretion. It isn't anything you wouldn't see hinted at in an R rated movie. It's just better, because imagination is always better than the movies. Yup.
Sull: OMGsull89 on April 21st, 2006 02:56 am (UTC)
Re: The edited, latest stuff. :) SOME still needs beta.
Hah, cool. I'll have to check it out. ^^
Wow... That's quite a few words. XD

All my EdWin stuff is on my ff.net account. ^^ I've got... what... I think about 10 one shots, all EdWin. I'm horrible at chaptered stories, never have time to update them regularly ^^;
I have trouble finding it when I want to read some too! I just hope mine turns out alright.

lol, because Havoc is a grown-up, and does grown-up things. That is a wonderful way to describe your reason. M rated stuff doesn't bother me. But thanks for the warning anyway.
Imagination is loads better than the movies! I concur. ^^
Well, I'mma off to read, methinks. Thanks for the link.