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07 August 2005 @ 09:50 pm
MF chapter 5!  
Moving Forward

author: carla, aka cali-chan
rating: PG-13, because of some swearing... Can't be helped, since there will be people calling Ed "short" once in a while. Rating might go up to R, though, depending on my mood when writing later chapters.
genre: AU, romance, a bit drama, really cheap humor ^^;;;
canon: manga ONLY!
pairings: EdoWin, RoyAi. Hughes will definitely be gushing about his wife a lot...
summary: AU, chaptered, high-school themed, but not your usual sweet-valley high school fanfic. Edward Elric has to become the best track runner there is, for his mother, for his brother, and for everyone else in his life. But will triumph come at a high cost?

in this chapter: It's Al's 17th birthday! So he angsts. And Mustang comes to Leizenburgh with a proposition.

Chapter 5: Not just his burden to bear/Not just his decision to make.
 
 
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Current Music: yellowcard, "ocean avenue"
 
 
edik_lyodoedikedik_lyodoedik on August 11th, 2005 02:51 pm (UTC)
Oh, NOW i'VE READ EVERYTHING AND I ADMIRE YOU! REALLY, YOU HAVE A GREAT TALENT. I REALY ADORE THE PLOT AND THE WAY YOU LEAD IT. THE WAY YOU CUT OFF EVERYTHING SUPERNATURAL AND LEFT ONLY THE VERY CENTER OF THE STORY... I MEAN THE MIX OF GUILT, RESPONSIBILITY AND LOVE... IT'S SURELY A GOOD THING: TO SHOW ALL THE FANS THAT THE STORY IS GREAT ITSELF REGARDLESS OF MAGIC AND FIGHTINGS... AND... BESIDES... AL IS REALLY KAWAII! AND I JUST LIKED HOW YOU PORTRAYED THE RELATIONSHIP OF ED AND WINRY BECOUSE IN THE MOST OF FICS THEY FIGHT TOO MUCH...

BUT ONE THINK... I COULDN'T GRASP IT FROM VERY BEGINNING BUT KNOW I UNDERSTAND IT... THE MOST NICE THING ABOUT ED AND AL IN THE MANGA AND EVEN IN THE ANIME IS THE FACT THAT AL HELPS ED A LOT AND NOT ONLY PROVIDING HIM SOME KIND OF MENTAL SUPPORT BUT ALSO IN OTHER THINGS. AND IN YOUR FIC ED DOES EVERYTHING ALMOST ON HIS OWN... BUT MAYBE IT SEEMS TO ME BECOUSE I LOVE AL (MANGA!AL) ALMOST MORE THAN ED. I JUST HOPE HE WILL PLAY SOME MORE IMPORTANT ROLE DEEPER IN THE FIC... I DIDN'T MEAN THAT YOU TALK LITTLE OF HIM, NOT AT ALL! BUT HE REALLY NEEDS TO "DO" SOMETHING.. I MEAN, MAKE SOME IMPORTANT ACTIONS... SORRY FOR MY AWKWARD MANNER OF SPEECH ^_^.

i hope you will publish some new chapters soon, though i really understand how difficult it is to continue a long story sometimes... and i strongly believe the ending wouldn't be worse than the beginning (you know, it happens rather often). In fact, i suppose it's going to be just great!

by the way... i'm sure that you write not only fanfiction, i can feel it from the text... or am i wrong? But you definitey like to read a lot! Are there some of your works in the i-net?